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Re: Chapter names?
In contrast, I'm relatively annoyed by chapter names, especially in fiction books. It gives the sense that the author specifically grouped the story in events, which gives the entire plot ...
May 7, 2007 -
Re: Five Tips for Writing Convincing Characters
On the topic of MAKE SURE YOU LIKE YOUR CHARACTERS, I don't think that you exactly phrased this correctly. Making them interesting, yes, it a good point.. but more so, ...
May 7, 2007 -
Re: (Not) My Music
This is beautiful and fluent, it flows off the tongue. You've created poetry of the recitation of imagery, which is an artform of itself. It'd like to see more of ...
May 7, 2007 -
Re: Properties of Yeast
You crawl through the back door and knock on the side of my cell phone. I wake in the hive of mornings to your voice, swooning security that keeps these ...
May 3, 2007 -
Re: Sunrays on a High
How long can Christ breathe out? The gears of my personal industry of ambition grind out the friction of my traditions. Bare legs beat and kick into the night's heat, ...
May 1, 2007 -
Re: To Pass From Your Lips
I didn't believe my parents when they told me about monsters not existing under the bed That may very well be a double negative, or I may just be wrong. ...
May 1, 2007 -
Re: Hush
Wonderful. And I'd like to commemorate you on your use of sentence structure to add dramatics. For example: Night >> sinking (simile) august >> looms (simile) guilt >> definite prophecies ...
Apr 28, 2007 -
Re: Failing "Reflower"
Twenty four perfect flowers: blooms open, white, like pearls pressed into pristine petals, and they whisper the smell of sunshine into the lazy wisps of afternoon breeze. Beneath them, soil, ...
Apr 25, 2007 -
Re: The reason Curbs were Invented
Paperless poet, snatching rocks off the road and pocketing them like heads-up pennies, blooming roadkill up ahead, plastic shimmering red and blue bursts of beauty. Unwalked land has blades of ...
Apr 21, 2007 -
Re: You're in my Address Book somewhere
The skitter of the needle on the record, and I can see you eyes - sick, wolflike - twitching in seas of grays, a quality of consciousness as clear as ...
Apr 17, 2007 -
Re: 36% success
I long to catch a greyhound, spotted with a silver diet drink and sharp toes cutting her path down these city streets. I want to teach her my name, sandwich ...
Apr 13, 2007 -
Re: Bingles and Boys
I enjoyed it, but I don't think a "golden" mane, for example, suits the rest of the tone of this poem that - excepting that one word - you have ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Fortune's Fool
I back "child support" edit. Smiles are in voices, and I personally love it enough the way it is.
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: Mother Mary
I'm on your front lawn, head between my knees, whispering prayers into the soil that's been scuffed up by my pacing feet -- It's been hours, now and three feet ...
Apr 6, 2007 -
Re: Isometry Rockstar
Her footsteps rattled, gum at the bottom of an empty coke can, aluminum trinkets and dead flavors stuck inside her veins. Broken bones stuffed underneath fabric, she was unethical, crooked ...
Apr 4, 2007
